20大學英語四級寫作試題考前熱點高分范文
行文思路
本題屬于提綱式文字命題。提綱第1點提出一個問題,提綱第2點要求分析這一問題產生的原因,提綱第3點要求說明如何解決該問題,由此可判斷本文應為問題解決型作文。
根據所給提綱,本文應包含如下內容:描述父母的期望和孩子的理想之間的矛盾;分析這種矛盾產生的主要原因;說明解決這一矛盾的辦法。
高分范文
Parental Hopes and Personal Ideals
All parents hope their children will have a bright future. However, parents expectations for their children are not always in accordance with their childrens personal ideals, and sometimes they are even conflicting with each other. This is often a main cause for quarrels and gaps between parents and children. But what lead to the conflict between parental hopes and personal ideals?
The following three factors contribute to the conflict. First of all, in this fast-changing society, parents and children have too many differences in mind. Secondly, traditional patriarchy is still influencing Chinese parents in modern society. They are used to making decisions for their children. Third, nowadays young people have strong independence, who want to plan their own future and control their own destiny. Thus the conflict between parents and children inevitably appear.
In order to solve the conflict, both parents and children should pay their efforts. For one thing, parents should give their children rights to make their own decisions. They may help their children make choices instead of replacing them to make choices. For another, children should learn to respect their parents advices since parents tend to have more life experience. Besides, to communicate with each other actively is necessary to their understanding each other. As long as both parents and children learn to think from the other sides point of view, the conflicts between them can be avoided.
【亮點點評】
和一致。
表示遞進。
通過轉折和設問句引出原因,容易引起注意。
過渡銜接詞語,使文章條理清晰、銜接緊密。
who引導非限制性定語從句。
為了,表示目的,常用于句首。
代替,而不是。
since引導原因狀語從句,表示既定的原因,常譯為既然。
從對方的角度。
佳句臨摩
1.佳句:Parents expectations for their children are not always in accordance with their childrens personal ideals, and sometimes they are even conflicting with each other.
臨摩:過多的壓力使得許多大學生產生抑郁、焦慮等心理疾病,甚至導致一些大學生自殺。
2.佳句:Nowadays young people have strong independence, who want to plan their own future and control their own destiny.
臨摩:郊區的新鮮空氣和美麗風景對那些忍受著空氣污染和噪音的城市居民會有很大的吸引力。
3.佳句:In order to solve the conflict, both parents and children should pay their efforts.
臨摩:為了保持舊的友誼,許多同學每天花費一兩個小時給親密的老朋友打電話。
【KEY】
1. Overdue pressure makes many college students suffer from psychological diseases, like depression, anxiety, and even leads to some students suicide.
2. The fresh air and beautiful scenery in the suburbs will be appealing to the city citizens, who suffer from air pollution and noises.
3. In order to keep those old friendships alive, many freshmen spend one or two hours a day calling their old close friends.
行文思路
本題屬于提綱式文字命題。提綱第1點提出一個問題,提綱第2點要求分析這一問題產生的原因,提綱第3點要求說明如何解決該問題,由此可判斷本文應為問題解決型作文。
根據所給提綱,本文應包含如下內容:描述父母的期望和孩子的理想之間的矛盾;分析這種矛盾產生的主要原因;說明解決這一矛盾的辦法。
高分范文
Parental Hopes and Personal Ideals
All parents hope their children will have a bright future. However, parents expectations for their children are not always in accordance with their childrens personal ideals, and sometimes they are even conflicting with each other. This is often a main cause for quarrels and gaps between parents and children. But what lead to the conflict between parental hopes and personal ideals?
The following three factors contribute to the conflict. First of all, in this fast-changing society, parents and children have too many differences in mind. Secondly, traditional patriarchy is still influencing Chinese parents in modern society. They are used to making decisions for their children. Third, nowadays young people have strong independence, who want to plan their own future and control their own destiny. Thus the conflict between parents and children inevitably appear.
In order to solve the conflict, both parents and children should pay their efforts. For one thing, parents should give their children rights to make their own decisions. They may help their children make choices instead of replacing them to make choices. For another, children should learn to respect their parents advices since parents tend to have more life experience. Besides, to communicate with each other actively is necessary to their understanding each other. As long as both parents and children learn to think from the other sides point of view, the conflicts between them can be avoided.
【亮點點評】
和一致。
表示遞進。
通過轉折和設問句引出原因,容易引起注意。
過渡銜接詞語,使文章條理清晰、銜接緊密。
who引導非限制性定語從句。
為了,表示目的,常用于句首。
代替,而不是。
since引導原因狀語從句,表示既定的原因,常譯為既然。
從對方的角度。
佳句臨摩
1.佳句:Parents expectations for their children are not always in accordance with their childrens personal ideals, and sometimes they are even conflicting with each other.
臨摩:過多的壓力使得許多大學生產生抑郁、焦慮等心理疾病,甚至導致一些大學生自殺。
2.佳句:Nowadays young people have strong independence, who want to plan their own future and control their own destiny.
臨摩:郊區的新鮮空氣和美麗風景對那些忍受著空氣污染和噪音的城市居民會有很大的吸引力。
3.佳句:In order to solve the conflict, both parents and children should pay their efforts.
臨摩:為了保持舊的友誼,許多同學每天花費一兩個小時給親密的老朋友打電話。
【KEY】
1. Overdue pressure makes many college students suffer from psychological diseases, like depression, anxiety, and even leads to some students suicide.
2. The fresh air and beautiful scenery in the suburbs will be appealing to the city citizens, who suffer from air pollution and noises.
3. In order to keep those old friendships alive, many freshmen spend one or two hours a day calling their old close friends.