6月大學英語六級寫作實例講評（三）
How to improve students mental health
1、 大學生的心理健康十分重要
2、 因此，學校可以......
3、 我們自己應當......
題目分析：
學生的心理健康是近年來被熱議的話題之一，屬于經典的問題解決型，故不外乎采用舉例子，作比較，分類別，列數字，打比方等方式討論。
參考范文：
Students mental health has been playing an increasingly important role in our day-to-day life. Indeed, it is widely accepted that it has gained growing popularity among persons in all walks of life. There is a general discussion today about the issue of disorder in brains.
Obviously, it is necessary that effective actions should be taken to prevent problems. Authorities in universities play a critical role in the situation. To begin with, schools, such as colleges or universities, can provide chances for the young men to ease their attention. Whats more, some are physically strong, but psychological problems are able to bring potential threats. Teaches may have a chance to find them in advance. Besides, specialists in this field are to be required to make full preparation for cases in time. Facing the crisis, experts can deal with it in a professional way, which means they have more or better opportunities to save us than others.
From the factors mentioned above, we may safely draw the conclusion that we can free ourselves from mental illness by taking certain precautions. For example, if you have pains or puzzles in mind, finding a friend to express these is a good way to release pressure. Certainly, there is little doubt that further attention will be paid to the issue.
Chance の 總結：
potential threats 潛在威脅
ease 減輕，舒緩
psychological problems 心理問題
precaution 預防措施
release pressure 釋放壓力
play an important/critical role in sth
it is widely accepted that
To begin with, Whats more, Besides,
From the factors mentioned above draw the conclusion that
等等均為經典模板句式!
附 2008年大學英語四六級評分標準：
33分--條理不清、思路紊亂，語言支離破碎或大部分句子均有錯誤，且多數為嚴重錯誤。
39分--基本切題。表達思想不清楚連貫性差。有較多嚴重的語言錯誤。
45分--基本切題。有些地方表達思想不夠清楚，文字勉強連貫;語言錯誤相當多，其中有一些是嚴重錯誤。
57分--切題。表達思想清楚，文字連貫，但有少量語言錯誤。
67分--切題。表達思想清楚，文字通順。連貫性較好，基本上無語言錯誤，僅有個別小錯。
文字不足酌情扣分：100-119扣1分;90-99扣3分;80-89扣4分;70-79扣5分;60-69扣6分;50-59扣7分;不足50扣9分
How to improve students mental health
1、 大學生的心理健康十分重要
2、 因此，學校可以......
3、 我們自己應當......
題目分析：
學生的心理健康是近年來被熱議的話題之一，屬于經典的問題解決型，故不外乎采用舉例子，作比較，分類別，列數字，打比方等方式討論。
參考范文：
Students mental health has been playing an increasingly important role in our day-to-day life. Indeed, it is widely accepted that it has gained growing popularity among persons in all walks of life. There is a general discussion today about the issue of disorder in brains.
Obviously, it is necessary that effective actions should be taken to prevent problems. Authorities in universities play a critical role in the situation. To begin with, schools, such as colleges or universities, can provide chances for the young men to ease their attention. Whats more, some are physically strong, but psychological problems are able to bring potential threats. Teaches may have a chance to find them in advance. Besides, specialists in this field are to be required to make full preparation for cases in time. Facing the crisis, experts can deal with it in a professional way, which means they have more or better opportunities to save us than others.
From the factors mentioned above, we may safely draw the conclusion that we can free ourselves from mental illness by taking certain precautions. For example, if you have pains or puzzles in mind, finding a friend to express these is a good way to release pressure. Certainly, there is little doubt that further attention will be paid to the issue.
Chance の 總結：
potential threats 潛在威脅
ease 減輕，舒緩
psychological problems 心理問題
precaution 預防措施
release pressure 釋放壓力
play an important/critical role in sth
it is widely accepted that
To begin with, Whats more, Besides,
From the factors mentioned above draw the conclusion that
等等均為經典模板句式!
附 2008年大學英語四六級評分標準：
33分--條理不清、思路紊亂，語言支離破碎或大部分句子均有錯誤，且多數為嚴重錯誤。
39分--基本切題。表達思想不清楚連貫性差。有較多嚴重的語言錯誤。
45分--基本切題。有些地方表達思想不夠清楚，文字勉強連貫;語言錯誤相當多，其中有一些是嚴重錯誤。
57分--切題。表達思想清楚，文字連貫，但有少量語言錯誤。
67分--切題。表達思想清楚，文字通順。連貫性較好，基本上無語言錯誤，僅有個別小錯。
文字不足酌情扣分：100-119扣1分;90-99扣3分;80-89扣4分;70-79扣5分;60-69扣6分;50-59扣7分;不足50扣9分
