習(xí)作評析（6）

　　　　習(xí)作題目2

　　　　請根據(jù)下面圖表所示內(nèi)容，用英語寫一篇短文，比較高中學(xué)生減負(fù)前后的有關(guān)情況。

　　　　注意：

　　　　1. 短文須包括所有圖表內(nèi)容，可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，使短文連貫；

　　　　2. 詞數(shù) 100 左右。

　　　　「學(xué)生原文」

　　　　Senior middle school students were heavily burdened with all kinds of homework. In the past， they took（1） about 6.5 hours in their classroom（2） a day. At home it took them 5 hours to finish their homework. So they only got less than 7 hours to sleep（3）。 Their free time was only three hours. As a result， their health was badly destroyed.（4）

　　　　Now the things（5） are getting better. About five hours is spent in class and hours for homework have reduced two hours（6）。 So that they have eight hours' sleep and also two other hours to do whatever they like（7）。

　　　　「名師點(diǎn)評」

　　　　本文要點(diǎn)齊全，語句通順，行文連貫，各種句型使用恰當(dāng)，但也存在同義詞誤用，語態(tài)，主謂不一致等少量錯(cuò)誤。如下：

　　　　（ 1 ） take 的主語不能是人，此處應(yīng)該為 spent .

　　　　（ 2 ）此處應(yīng)是 classrooms ，因?yàn)榍懊嬗?their 來修飾。

　　　　（ 3 ）此處應(yīng)該用 hours' sleep 更符合英語習(xí)慣。

　　　　（ 4 ）此處應(yīng)是 Their health was badly damaged.

　　　　（ 5 ） things 為情況前面不用冠詞。

　　　　（ 6 ）應(yīng)改為： hours for homework have been reduced to two hours.

　　　　（ 7 ）此處應(yīng)為： also two more hours to do whatever they like.

　　　　「精品范文」

　　　　Senior middle school students were heavily burdened with all kinds of homework. In the past， they spent about 6.5 hours in their classroom a day. At home， it took them 5 hours to finish their homework. So they only got less than 7 hours' sleep. Their free time was only three hours. As a result， their health was badly damaged.

　　　　Now the things are getting better. About five hours are spent in class and the time for homework had been reduced two hours. So that they have eight hours' sleep and also two more hours to do whatever they like.

　　習(xí)作評析（6）

　　　　習(xí)作題目2

　　　　請根據(jù)下面圖表所示內(nèi)容，用英語寫一篇短文，比較高中學(xué)生減負(fù)前后的有關(guān)情況。

　　　　注意：

　　　　1. 短文須包括所有圖表內(nèi)容，可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，使短文連貫；

　　　　2. 詞數(shù) 100 左右。

　　　　「學(xué)生原文」

　　　　Senior middle school students were heavily burdened with all kinds of homework. In the past， they took（1） about 6.5 hours in their classroom（2） a day. At home it took them 5 hours to finish their homework. So they only got less than 7 hours to sleep（3）。 Their free time was only three hours. As a result， their health was badly destroyed.（4）

　　　　Now the things（5） are getting better. About five hours is spent in class and hours for homework have reduced two hours（6）。 So that they have eight hours' sleep and also two other hours to do whatever they like（7）。

　　　　「名師點(diǎn)評」

　　　　本文要點(diǎn)齊全，語句通順，行文連貫，各種句型使用恰當(dāng)，但也存在同義詞誤用，語態(tài)，主謂不一致等少量錯(cuò)誤。如下：

　　　　（ 1 ） take 的主語不能是人，此處應(yīng)該為 spent .

　　　　（ 2 ）此處應(yīng)是 classrooms ，因?yàn)榍懊嬗?their 來修飾。

　　　　（ 3 ）此處應(yīng)該用 hours' sleep 更符合英語習(xí)慣。

　　　　（ 4 ）此處應(yīng)是 Their health was badly damaged.

　　　　（ 5 ） things 為情況前面不用冠詞。

　　　　（ 6 ）應(yīng)改為： hours for homework have been reduced to two hours.

　　　　（ 7 ）此處應(yīng)為： also two more hours to do whatever they like.

　　　　「精品范文」

　　　　Senior middle school students were heavily burdened with all kinds of homework. In the past， they spent about 6.5 hours in their classroom a day. At home， it took them 5 hours to finish their homework. So they only got less than 7 hours' sleep. Their free time was only three hours. As a result， their health was badly damaged.

　　　　Now the things are getting better. About five hours are spent in class and the time for homework had been reduced two hours. So that they have eight hours' sleep and also two more hours to do whatever they like.